Coexistence

Hey everyone!

I have to submit a poem for my creative writing class and feedback would be appreciated.

Coexistence
Jessica Marie Cavaliere
April 23, 2010

Whatever happened to acceptance and peace?
All religions, whether mono or polytheist preach
love your brothers and sisters, mother and father.
Yet, some within all faiths don't even bother
to follow the word of their Holy Book
and perverting the message in lives they took.
Some followers of Christ want you to see the light,
Other believers' point of views cause a fight.
Some followers of Mohammed hold the sword,
Understand, no compulsion in religion is ignored.
Our media, in this land of the free,
Pervert the message of Islam as filthy
blood-hungry savages that kill all
or if one goes to Israel prepare to fall
a bloody death from Jewish suicide men.
As we were founded on rights numbering ten,
The first securing the right to worship
the God or Gods and lessons from their lips.
God Bless America, or the God taken out
for those who are uptight and pout.
Whatever happened to our rights
Different religions are an uncommon sight
because of the fear of being branded
instead of friendship and laughter banded.


Questions to consider:

1.) What were the positive aspects of this poem?
2.) What did you like least about this poem?
3.) What was the message you took from this poem?
4.) What kind of emotion did it envoke in you?

Other comments would be helpful!

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